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Dreams. Nightmares. Unforgettable nights of longing for the things so far away. For the things that scare me. Pleasant tales of love, overthrown by stories of hell itself - all unfolding around my bed. My red sheets are the bloodstains on the gray wall one night, a bouquet of roses the next.

What are dreams? Imaginary places of make-believe happiness, as if some form of natural prozac? Realms where fantasy is pushed beyond the borders of our very imagination?

I can't tell. I don't want to. My dreams are chapters of the book of my life, they're the red ribbon on the edge of the next page. Never managed to do much reading with my eyes open. Why, God why, would anyone want to live in something as shallow as reality?

Being awake is torture. It's a red car flashing over the gray asphalt, it's the fast lane with me behind the wheel - pointless and fatal. I never got my license, you know. And for good reason; I don't want to control things. I don't need any kind of control, all I need pure freedom.

The doctor once told me I had insomnia. Rarely ever in my life have I hated someone that much, that my vision blurred to red. But even that didn't last long.

Four hours ago, the doctor said I passed away in my sleep.



He lied.

I just died a dreamer.
I've been waiting for ages to finish this. It was meant as a painting, but it couldn't add to the words, let alone replace them. Blame ~ELECTROpanda for making me finish it eventually.
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Jufda Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This didn't lack a thing. Touching, attractive and beautiful.
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clownofthedreaming Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2009   Writer
beautiful lines...and the end was great. nice and fast paced, enjoyed it.
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RosaryOfSighsx Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
beautifully written :heart:
I absolutely love this piece
amazing :aww:
"Four hours ago, the doctor said I passed away in my sleep. "
perfect line
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RomeroX Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2008
Pretty good,

I enjoyed it.

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poetoffire Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2008
I love how you don't substitute any other words for "red", like scarlet or crimson. Makes it that much more powerful.
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Itti Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this. Lovely descriptions and metaphors.

Some critique:
:bulletgreen: I think Prozac has a capital?
:bulletgreen: My dreams are chapters of the book of my life; they're the red ribbon on the edge of the next page.
:bulletgreen: I don't need any kind of control; all I need is pure freedom.
Semicolon can be a full stop (or possibly a dash or colon) if you prefer, but shouldn't be a comma.
:bulletgreen: Rarely ever in my life have I hated someone that much, that my vision blurred to red.
I don't think the comma's right here. Also "rarely ever" sounds odd - do you mean "hardly ever" or "rarely"? I suggest
Hardly ever in my life have I hated someone so much that my vision blurred to red.
or
Hardly ever in my life have I hated someone that much. My vision blurred to red.
(also getting rid of the that much that thing which was a little awkward)

Anyway, good job. I enjoyed reading this :)
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Verticae Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2008  Professional Digital Artist
Tanks for the feedback. I wrote this after two days of no sleep, hence, mistakes were to be expected. It's always good to have them pointed out, though, especially in such a constructive and helpful way!
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deviantmad Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2008
you should read metamorphosis by kafka.
i am in the first twenty pages and man that is a freakin dream to be in
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