Dreams. Nightmares. Unforgettable nights of longing for the things so far away. For the things that scare me. Pleasant tales of love, overthrown by stories of hell itself - all unfolding around my bed. My red sheets are the bloodstains on the gray wall one night, a bouquet of roses the next.
What are dreams? Imaginary places of make-believe happiness, as if some form of natural prozac? Realms where fantasy is pushed beyond the borders of our very imagination?
I can't tell. I don't want to. My dreams are chapters of the book of my life, they're the red ribbon on the edge of the next page. Never managed to do much reading with my eyes open. Why, God why, would anyone want to live in something as shallow as reality?
Being awake is torture. It's a red car flashing over the gray asphalt, it's the fast lane with me behind the wheel - pointless and fatal. I never got my license, you know. And for good reason; I don't want to control things. I don't need any kind of control, all I need pure freedom.
The doctor once told me I had insomnia. Rarely ever in my life have I hated someone that much, that my vision blurred to red. But even that didn't last long.
Four hours ago, the doctor said I passed away in my sleep.
He lied.
I just died a dreamer.
I absolutely love this piece
amazing
"Four hours ago, the doctor said I passed away in my sleep. "
perfect line
I enjoyed it.
x
Some critique:
Semicolon can be a full stop (or possibly a dash or colon) if you prefer, but shouldn't be a comma.
I don't think the comma's right here. Also "rarely ever" sounds odd - do you mean "hardly ever" or "rarely"? I suggest
Hardly ever in my life have I hated someone so much that my vision blurred to red.
or
Hardly ever in my life have I hated someone that much. My vision blurred to red.
(also getting rid of the that much that thing which was a little awkward)
Anyway, good job. I enjoyed reading this
i am in the first twenty pages and man that is a freakin dream to be in